WALT choose words that describe a moment (in an exciting way) for the reader
YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS
- begins in the action
- present tense (I am, not I was)
- short, sharp sentences
- strong verbs
- uses the senses (look, feel, hear, taste, smell)
- language features (simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia, metaphor)
- show personality (sounds like you, humour, feelings, exaggeration)
Today was the day when we did the master chef competition. We got called out then we had to wash our hands and get our ingredients. We went to a table and started putting in the ingredients. We put in 1/2 cup of pancake flour. Add in 55 milters have milk with the flour in the bowl. And we put in melted butter. But there were two more ingredients. We didn't even add the sugar and we didn't use the sugar in the pancakes. Anyway, we mixed the mixture together and we took all the ingredients outside and started putting in the mixture. And just a little demonstrate when you see a lot have bubbles come on the pancake, you will have to flip it over to see the other side if it looks fresh. We look underneath the pancake and we thought it was fresh and so we flipped it over. We continued with all the other mixter, and we put it on the plate that we were using for the pancakes. We put all the ingredients back inside and we racked the chocolate, decorated it around the pancake, We made the peachers surround the pancake and we got it ready for our judges. Miss America and Mr Italiano. The judges walk to group to group until he came to us. My feet were running in one spot because I was nervous that when we tested it out, it taste like nothing. Well it's the judges choice rather they liked it or not. After they swallowed the food. They said it was.......................... yummy. Oh jeez. Maybe they liked the chocolate and the preachers. The judges did the score. Mr M turns the board for it to face us and the V8 JELLY BEANS had won. We got the score have 13. The others had like 15 16 18. I hope we win at lunch.
Now for our menu was, Cheese, Salvoes, Bread, And carrots. But we used the carrots for dinner. We started boiling up the salvoes and while Liam and Zach were watching that with David I buttered the bread inside. Jessica and Bidi were doing the veggies for dinner. The salvoes were reading and so David cut them up, placed the on top have the cheese put the bread and stuff inside it in the toaster oven and got it out to present too the judges. We had to do a presentation about it. So we chose Jessica. After she said the presentation we ate the same that we prepared to the judges. So they both did the score again and now this time the TITANS won.
I was so nervous because we were cooking meat for this. We grab our ingredients. The class goes crazy. We go back to our table and started sorting the plan. The veggies were done but we had to cook the meatballs and the noodles. We get cold water done and we start boiling. We cook the meat and it looked delicious. We bring the stuff inside dished it for us and the judges. We eat before the judges eat ours first. We finish our dish. We see the judges eat our food. They put on the score and the.................Titans had win again. “Well it wasn't really about winning it was about education and teamwork” I said to my group. But I forgot. We won at desert. Thats one thing for sure. Well done to the Lightning Bolts at desert.